prognosis
terminal and soon ...
are you still there?
your fine brain
undervalued
erupts
your brain creates
more and more cells
trying harder
your mind
expands and narrows
the focus
my mind
fixed on your dying
stops
I do nothing
think
of nothing else
you think
of those around you
dying or ?
you think
of those who have left
the ward
you are 18
you think of a future
you dreamed
30 Poems in 30 Days: 5, An impossible event
Rosemary,
ReplyDeleteYour piece strips a vital, intense experience down to its essence. This piece is tight and direct, sad yet uplifting, strong but vulnerable.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/09/06/leaving-a-ring/
Thank you, Kim. Years of attempting haiku proved useful for this one! I do think some experiences are so terrible, the facts speak for themselves and don't need embellishment.
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