(American sentences)
Streetlight, rain, a rain-blurred moon in a black sky – my Autumn neighbourhood.
After the big April floods bumpy road surfaces muddy edges.
Flood-ruined possessions line the streets, piled as high as the water was.
Climate change summer too hot too wet: garden of weeds and mosquitos.
After a few days the rain stops; after a few more the cat ventures out.
A branch from the bush with red flowers juts across the path: pruning time.
Music piercing walls and scaling fences: schoolboy neighbour's recorder.
Shrieking cockatoos fly over at twilight, urging each other home.
When shops and businesses shut for the night, it’s already sunset.
Day 16 of April Poetry Month at 'imaginary garden with real toads' is Micro Poetry ~ Streetlight Rain in which we are invited to write poem of 10 lines or less, or to try the American Sentences invented by Allen Ginsberg as a Western kind of haiku, or to focus on the theme 'Streetlight, Rain'. So I thought I'd try the lot! If my 10 separate American sentences don't exactly constitute one poem, they at least have a common subject, all being descriptive of this time of year where I live.
After a few days the rain stops; after a few more the cat ventures out.
ReplyDeleteI love the way the semi-colon creates the pause in this sentence. Thanks for sharing your rainy impressions of April.
These are really good, Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteThey work alone and together.
ReplyDeleteI love that last sentence for its coziness and settling in
ReplyDeleteLove these, especially with that ending sentence... perfect!
ReplyDeleteThat's an impressive collection of American Sentences, Rosemary - I couldn't manage ten! I especially like:
ReplyDelete'After the big April floods bumpy road surfaces muddy edges';
'After a few days the rain stops; after a few more the cat ventures out';
and.
'Summer over, I wear pyjamas to bed; the cat snuggles closer'.
Yours, though, cohered beautifully into a whole, indivisible poem! :)
DeleteSo clever to do 10 American sentences. :) I love all of these, Rosemary.
ReplyDeleteOh gosh these are absolute perfection, Rosemary!❤️
ReplyDeleteQuite American for an Aussie :) ~
ReplyDeleteCongratulations. I believe you brilliantly and poetically met your goal. (with a message - all returns)
ReplyDeleteLove how These sentences build upon each other
ReplyDeleteEspecially loved: After a few days the rain stops; after a few more the cat ventures out. Goodness, it is an entire story!
ReplyDeleteFantastic! You took the challenge and made a story out of it.
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