twine with the stars
at night
to travel unseen
heights
tracking the
mysteries,
touching the Pleiades.
Their roots stretch
underground
too, Pleiadian light
taken down, deeply
wound,
tangled in our depths
and
thrusting up through
the crust,
through red earth,
clay or sand.
Trees know these
Sisters well;
they love them as they
must.
They love, and they
stand tall,
threading light through
the dust.
At Poets United this week the Midweek Motif prompt is Trees. At dVerse Meeting the Bar today we are asked to write in the 'Pleiades' form of seven six-syllable lines with a one word title, every line beginning with the initial of the title. Not quite what was asked for: I've written a Pleaides followed by a reverse Pleiades, as one poem, and added a rhyme scheme not actually required. We were also asked to include the name of a heavenly body, so I chose the obvious. And — obviously —I've combined both prompts.
Owwwooooo! Wow. And the ttttts have it for the win! Actually, there is no competition in this poem, just an artful tangling of the kind sisters do when they love each other. Brilliant use of the form times 2.
ReplyDeleteThe light in the trees, it made me think of Telperion and Laurelin, the trees from "The Silmarillion." Well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you. *Reminds self - get around to reading that book at last!*
Deletesmooth as silk - this one flowed brilliantly
ReplyDeleteWowzers, you wrapped the prompts in one brilliant package and tied it with red ribbon! Fantastic, Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteThe trees are a true link between the soil and stars.. The flow and the creative use of breaking the form up into many stanzas work wonders.
ReplyDeleteOh yes, that's right — I already forgot I made that modification too!
Delete(Yes, the trees are, aren't they? *Smile.*)
Trees do stand tall
ReplyDeletewhat a brilliant combo...love this sweet & lasting relationship of the trees with the seven sisters....
ReplyDeleteoh loved the effect a lot....beautiful
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the form and really like the way you have made it into a full fledged long poem , an inspiration to me!!Thanks
ReplyDeleteActually you were the inspiration to me! (Or half of it anyway.) I enjoyed trying this form, but just couldn't say all I wanted in a mere seven lines.
DeleteWe tend to give natural things attributes that we have ourselves have not realizing they probably have some we would dearly love ourselves. I really must try this form of poetry (or my version of it I expect). Very impressed.
ReplyDeleteYes, do try! It was fun.
DeleteVery clever weaving of the connection between stars and trees ~ Love the t words and format of the poem ~
ReplyDeletevery nice work on the form...i should have thought of linking them to get me more space...ha...it is a cool connection you make as well from tree to star...i am particularly fond of trees...
ReplyDeleteI am too, Brian! *Smile.*
DeleteFantastic job bringing both prompt and form together. Your images seen to come alive with this. Brava!
ReplyDeleteOh, thank you! :)
Deletenice meeting of the minds... like salt and pepper.. it worked and was a good read
ReplyDeleteLoely word work here Rosemary!
ReplyDeletethe beauty and grandeur of nature
ReplyDeletetowering to celestial crests
tracing new trajectories from
timeless roots
the poem reflects strength of faith
tenderness of humanity
togetherness with love and loyalty -
talent superb in poetic expression
Oh, thank you for this lovely verse comment!
Deletewelcome
DeleteI love the idea of the trees pulling the light of the stars into their roots...into the ground. Beautiful work and great idea to link sets of these for a longer variation. :)
ReplyDeleteI have always seen trees as a conduit between earth and heaven / heaven and earth.
DeleteThis is lovely, Rosemary. You have really aced the Pleiades form.
ReplyDeletePerfect blend for the two prompts, Rosemary. This celebrates the deeper meaning of trees for me. What would we do without them.
ReplyDeleteThey certainly give us a great deal!
DeleteA lovely job of combining the prompts..there is something so alluring about trees and nature.
ReplyDeleteQuite a feat to have as many T words to be used and combining the prompts! Trees would be missed if they are not around. Less greenery obviously! Great lines Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteHank
That last stanza is lovely, love the imagery of "threading light through dust."
ReplyDeleteLike the connection between trees and light...and sure the last stanza brings it all together. Enjoyed reading. Beautiful poem. x
ReplyDeleteRosemary, this is officially my favorite poem of the week, along with Carrie's offering!
ReplyDeleteAww! How you warm my heart! Dashing off at once to see Carrie's. :)
DeleteI much appreciate everyone's lovely comments!
ReplyDeleteVery well done - all those T words for a poem meeting two prompts. :-)
ReplyDeleteClever, touching; like the creative way you met the parameters of the prompt, but had the audacious oomph to add several other factors; the poetics came first, & last. Impressed with this one.
ReplyDeleteThank you Glenn. Yes, the poetics do come first and last; It's very nice to have that recognised.
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