Gave her heart
only for a few seconds.
More than enough.
******
Buying silk,
an artist expressed
a desire to know velvets.
******
In the garden
very quiet
dream-life taking hold —
remember?
******
Pure frosty mornings:
rare occasions
when there is no wind.
when there is no wind.
The tenWords form is an invention of Brian Miller's. At dVerse today we are asked to try some. I extracted the above from pages of the novel The Maker of Heavenly Trousers by Daniel Varé; so they are also, in a sense, found poems, and — because some of the words are far apart — they are similar to erasure poems too.
These are all lovely, little bubbles of thought. My favourite is the silky one: In the 1930s, my mother had a black silk velvet evening dress, slinky to the thighs, then swirly.
ReplyDeleteThe way you write about that dress could be a poem in itself!
DeleteThe tenWords, eraser poems and found poems can all be made into limericks as well, then or sound like them. I like the first one best.
ReplyDeleteInteresting thought! But ten words surely wouldn't be enough for a limerick?
DeleteI loved the second one. :-)
ReplyDelete-HA
(Don't tell anyone but it's my favourite too. :)
DeleteThe first one is by far my favourite!
ReplyDelete*Grin*
DeleteI like this a lot.. the first one a clear favorite of mine.. each a little story though.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad to know I made them work that way.
DeleteLove the last one, just enjoyed yesterday...this 'rare occasion' ~ nice touch
ReplyDeletewonderful! Love the one about the silk buyer desiring to know velvets
ReplyDeleteIntriguing, isn't it?
DeleteI specially love the first and second but all are lovely Rosemary ~ thanks for sharing ~
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading. :)
Deletethe artist buying silks made me smile...
ReplyDeleteit led me back to a memory of when i did some silk
art in a class...and the people that i shared the class with...
It's lovely that our poems can evoke things for the readers that we can't even dream.
DeleteI like the idea of using the erasure 'method' for this form as a few poets have done. The last two poems are the one I like best.
ReplyDeleteI'm pleased they appeal to you. :)
DeleteWhat an interesting technique you used, Rosemary, to do your 'TenWords.' My favorite is the third one...which really carries me away! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteOh, that's nice, Mary!
DeleteGave her heart
ReplyDeleteonly for a few seconds.
More than enough
It is so easy when his wants are not demanding Takes little to keep him satisfied! These are rare finds! Great lines Rosemary!
Hank
Glad you enjoyed them, Hank.
Deletethe desire to know velvet... oh i like this one esp.. the yearning for texture...i so can feel this
ReplyDelete*Big smile.*
DeleteI like the air of mystery in No. 3.
ReplyDeleteI love the way different people are responding to different pieces.
DeleteNice job extracting from the text. I loved the artist one. As a would-be occasional artist this spoke to me of texture. Ha! I just saw what Claudia wrote!
ReplyDelete*Grin*
DeleteIsn't it amazing that you can wake up in a wintry morning without the feeling of being over burdened by chill. I really read some warming words in this one.
ReplyDeleteGlad you are warmed - especially if you are in winter at present,
DeleteLove these poems, especially the second one.
ReplyDeleteThat one does seem to be emerging as the favourite. :)
DeleteLovely, one and all, but I especially like the second and third ones.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I'm glad they all appeal to someone.
DeleteThese are terrific, Rosemary==interesting, thought-provoking, fun. K. (Manicddaily.wordpress)
ReplyDeleteThank you, dear K.
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