'Thou,' I say
to Mother
(She who is all this)
to give respect.
Not that we are
used to hear
the old tongue,
but I know it.
My hand is ready
to pull from fire
what black ashes
I can
to spit at that worm
the man — but she says,
'He is My son. Learn now
to flow, be water.'
Written in response to a Words Count prompt at 'imaginary garden with real toads' in which we are asked for a poem of 60 or fewer words, using some from a list of 23 'ultraconserved' words dating from the Ice Age, which the Eurasiatic languages have in common (seeming to indicate that there was an original mother tongue). The words are:
thou
I
not
that
we
to give
who
this
what
man / male
ye
old
mother
to hear
hand
fire
to pull
black
to flow
bark
ashes
to spit
worm
Oh, this is truly wonderful, Rosemary. Such a clever way with the words to paint this intense scene so succinctly.
ReplyDelete'He is My son. Learn now to flow, be water.'
ReplyDeleteThat is wonderful. I think she has bent over backward with man so far.
Fabulous! A whole dark story there.
ReplyDeleteA mother's favorite son is growing up here. I love how you told it, putting Mother in her favored place before the action started. The younger son reminds me some of the Biblical Joseph whose other, older, brothers were worms, but still their father's son.
ReplyDeleteIt also reminded me of the rituals of the N Zee Indigenous people. We spent a mid-day with one of these tribes and observed some their rituals. One of course was the welcoming of new guests. That involved the rubbing of noses in which we participated.
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I love that last stanza....the depiction of man as worm and then the turn in the middle of it, especially.
ReplyDeleteI think that even worms of men can be forgiven.. all men have a caring mother somewhere. Love the last two line.. be like the water.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE "Learn how to flow. Be water."
ReplyDeleteAgreed with Sherry.. the closing lines are magical :D
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
I love the suggestion that even though we're not used to the mother tongue that deep inside we all know it.
ReplyDeleteI know I commented on this. Maybe I am in your spam? I totally love it! and mother may well acknowledge her son and caution leniency. That would be just like her, so loving and all.
ReplyDeletethis has the flow of myth, of stories passed down over generations ~
ReplyDeleteMuch mystery in this well crafted piece and the last two lines a great sign-off
ReplyDeleteit tugs at the heart, the ideals, here presented
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Mother's heart is always with the son come what may! There has to be adjustments made by her and others! Very truly said Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteHank
the old tongue... respect... ah, i love it. cheers!
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