You are leaving, he said to me,
and never again shall we see each
other.
What am I going to do? And what
will you do, when we are far
apart?
We sat at the edge of Dreaming
River,
letting our bare legs dangle
in that green and rushing stream.
The clouds were swift, blown
sideways.
I shall have my flask of green
water
gathered from Dreaming River. I
shall drink
drop by drop the memories of me
and you,
and I shall not thirst, I said.
even frothier clouds in the river.
On the edge of the water, gripping
the grass tussocks, he saw this
and swore.
I want to go too, he said. I want
to go
far from here, as you can do —
but me, I'm eternally caught.
He glared at the clouds as they
raced away.
I shall come back, I promised,
after one year
and one day. Watch as the clouds
pass over.
You will see me flying back to
you. Only wait.
Meet me at the edge of Dreaming
River.
But when I returned in a year and
a day,
he never looked or saw. His gaze
was turned towards a laughing
woman
who led him away from Dreaming
River.
That edge, I heard her say, is
dangerous.
One day, she said, you could fall
and be submerged in the green
water.
She danced him away from the edge.
I am watching the clouds as they
scud
sideways in front of the river
wind. I am
dangling my legs in deep green
water,
dreaming, at the edge of Lonely River.
Note: A fictional imagining, not autobiography!
dreaming, at the edge of Lonely River.
Note: A fictional imagining, not autobiography!
The latest Play It Again at imaginary garden with real toads, asks us to revisit a previous challenge. I chose In Other Words from Jan. 15 2015, which asked poets to take a book title which already used words in unusual combination, and replace some words with others, also unexpected. I Turned The City of Dreaming Books into The Edge of Dreaming River.
nice write; the reality of Lonely river though was sad, made me feel like crying out on behalf of the watcher, stop come back
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much love...
It did become the "Lonely River". This is a sad poem, Rosemary. You wrote it so nicely, compelling a response. I could have stopped at the end of verse three as at that point it was happy sad, a parting but full of hope and expectation.
ReplyDeleteAs they say, "Absence makes the heart grow fonder." But sometimes that growth is one-sided.
There comes a time in life when these things happen, I will hope not too fast for me. I do know that you are there now. Just keep on doing like you are though, we (bloggers) are at least second tier friends for you. We have love in our hearts for you, I do.
BTW, I am slacking off blogging for a bit but will read when I can and even might post a little. It's like a compulsion with me. But we are going to travel, our distant High School Senior is graduating and we are moving too. Lots of travel and work coming up.
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Happy travelling! Will look forward to seeing your posts and comments when possible.
Delete(And don't worry, the story in this poem is a fictional imagining.)
I have made the note more noticeable now! :)
DeleteYour narrative is very tenderly told, and has an authenticity which is easy to relate to. I loved the descriptions (especially those in stanza 3) and the title is quite perfect.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully wrought. Until I read your note, at the end, I thought it might apply to someone leaving via the river of death. But I see this is not autobiography. It is a beautiful tale, wonderfully told....I especially love the clouds blown sideways, and the title and name, Dreaming River.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely story, filled with imagination and wonder.
ReplyDeleteYou've crafted a beautiful story here...I love the deep green waters that surge through this.
ReplyDeleteA friend on facebook had mentioned the Guadalupe, a river I fell in love with when visiting Texas nine years ago. I was struck by its turquoise-green colour. So it helped inspire the poem, although the poem is not meant to be about that or any real river. (The photo is actually of the Tweed River near where I live, which is only green — in places — by virtue of the reflections.)
DeleteSuch a lovely title..Your poem speaks the language of water.
ReplyDeleteThis is so dreamy. I love the visuals of green river :-)
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