I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world, to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

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7 May 2017

Tan Renga for Jane

At Carpe Diem, in honour of the late Jane Reichhold, we are asked to add two lines to some of her haiku, in 'tan renga' – which I found challenging, because I learn that the idea of tan renga is to associate on one aspect of the haiku, not what it says as a whole. My associations are with  the middle line of each, except the final one where I associate to the last line.


morning breeze
coming in the window
surf sounds                                              © Jane Reichhold

scents of briny ocean
and the shrill calls of gulls                      © Rosemary Nissen-Wade

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without lights
the brightness of a blue sky
full of stars                                               © Jane Reichhold

the white swathe of milky way
superimposed like a cloud                        © Rosemary Nissen-Wade

*

balanced at dawn
a full moon slides into the sea
without ripples                                         © Jane Reichhold

the sun melts upward smoothly
from the opposite horizon                        © Rosemary Nissen-Wade

*

stars bend down
into the wind of whitecaps
morning light                                           © Jane Reichhold

the stars gradually fade
sky and water brighten                             © Rosemary Nissen-Wade



Written for Carpe Diem Universal Jane #16 Morning Breeze
Also linking to Poets United's Poetry Pantry #352



27 comments:

  1. the sun melts upward smoothly
    from the opposite horizon... melting upwards is such a great image.

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  2. I love the call and answer - a wonderful way to remember someone special

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  3. This looks like a lot of fun. You have completed the task very well indeed.

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  4. This is soo cool!❤️ I love the form it feels like a poetic conversation between two people❤️

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  5. Ah, I can almost hear these being read like a duet it sung. Good job on this challenge!

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  6. Beautifully done, Rosemary. Your lines complement and contrast Jane's so well. A lovely combination of words & imagery.

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  7. Luv the last tan-renga best

    Have a nice Sunday Rosemary

    much love...

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  8. It reads like a dance, Rosemary.

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  9. Very very beautiful, Rosemary. Seamlessly done. Wow.

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  10. Agree with Sherry, your additions are seamless. Lovely post, Rosemary.

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  11. All lovely and flowing ..."wind of whitecaps" lingers

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    1. Yes, that is a marvellous image of Jane's; couldn't be bettered.

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  12. The feel from all of these pieces is lovely. There is just such a nice flow between them.

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  13. Love the seamless way you made the lines complete...

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  14. This form is lovely and I really liked your first and last one. It's as if the words were meant to be together.

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  15. What a delightful memorium. Somewhere, in the great perhaps, she's enjoying your 2-line embellishments of her haikus!

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  16. Lovely. What a nice exercise to honor Jane. You did a great job of complementing her poems with yours.

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  17. You did a beautiful job with these.

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  18. These are lovely. For me, the first one, was positively: transportive. A captivating exercise that has produced some stellar augmented pieces.

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  19. I like each one, but especially the last one!

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  20. Wow you have done a great job all four tan renga are gorgeous.

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  21. You nailed them all! Great job!

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