The rain comes down hard
and sudden with thunder
the heat unravels me
I begin to blur at the edges
he has draped purple orchids
along the top of the window
I am looking for sunset
wanting it to flame fierce
between the two of us
are cords and tangles
dusk grows dimmer
and my eyelids droop
he is lying down already
his silence invites me
the rain dwindles
and the heat abates
shadows begin to play
along the far horizon
sound has all but ceased
and the light intensifies
Rosemary watches the day
blaze before it dies.
NaPoWriMo Day 12
I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world,
to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')
to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')
This blog is not, 'Here are my very best poems'. It's for work in progress, subject to revision.
Posts may be updated without notice at any time. Completed work appears in my books.
12 April 2010
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I love that switch to 3rd person at the end. It's so... laden.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'm glad you think so. Another friend found it puzzling. I was contemplating changing the rest to 3rd person until I read your comment. Now I'll leave it as is.
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