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13 August 2017

She Writes Long Poems

She writes long poems which look calmly at pain
as though there is nothing wrong about feeling pain.

The night draws down cold after a day of cloud —
heavy cloud, formed to hold the painful threat of rain.

What night was it she wore that white flower? She forgets —
in any case has no power nor wish to call that pain back again.

Darkness is vast; words lengthen in silence, attenuate.
New shapes cast new meaning, pain slowly made plain.

(Note: I am not she who will write poems many pages long
so as to push back night, at once to confront and deaden pain.)


Playing with form; inspired by the 'quasi-ghazals' of John Calvin Rezmerski and the long poems of Judith Crispin. 

Linked to Poets United's Poetry Pantry #366

28 comments:

  1. I think anything can be a subject of poetry. Pain is certainly one of those subjects that we don't often think of when we think of writing a poem. I do agree though, that once one is finished with the pain one has no desire to bring it back again. (And personal aside - thankfully, with time, pain memories fade!)

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  2. This is a very intriguing poem to read and imagine. Interesting form. I loved it, Rosemary.

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  3. Well, we have to compliment your flow and style.

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  4. "pain slowly made plain."...Specially when a meaning is deciphered :)

    "Darkness is vast; words lengthen in silence, attenuate.
    New shapes cast new meaning, pain slowly made plain."...My favorite part.

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  5. Long may you write - either long or short..it's all good!

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  6. love the opening stanza... just beautifully written.

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  7. Interesting rhyme scheme that works. It's fun to play around with form and here, you've have done it well.

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  8. thisreally captures one's imagination! well written

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  9. 'Darkness is vast; words lengthen in silence, attenuate. New shapes cast new meaning, pain slowly made plain'.. this is so powerful!

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  10. Pain does alter our conception of things. Writing about it in verse or prose is quite a task as the reader doesn't know whether to sympathise or merely relate it to their own. I really like the way the poem grips the reader to feel the pain themself.

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  11. I love this style very much. Very inspiring. Sometimes we need longer poems to express long kept silence...

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  12. I enjoyed your use of form, rhyme and repition here, Rosemary...certainly, pain is a recurrent fact of our lives, and appears as such in your verse.
    Steve K.

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  13. i've encountered the Ghazal nice now that you have offered the quasi ghazal, Rosemary and yes personal pain is a subject i think we at some stage in our writing shy away from because we dont wish to go through the process again

    much love...

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  14. I think it is not the length of a poem, but the depth of the words. You have captured remnants of pain in your words. A unique poem for today!

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  15. I really like the second stanza about the coming rain.

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  16. This is beautifully done, Rosemary!

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  17. Knowing pain is a constant reminder one is not alone. Pain can be reflected in a relationship that is hungry for love!

    Hank

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  18. Interesting form! Whether it is physical, mental, or spiritual pain - we do not choose to go back there. I know I do not choose to think of past pain. Although after I had my surgery for cancer and had the vomits for a whole day, I'll look back on that and compare the present with the past - I'll say, at least I'm not vomiting with a new hysterectormy! We are funny critters sometimes.

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  19. Physical pain and psychic pain. Both have their place and acceptance in our lives, especially as we age. I enjoyed this.

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  20. I admire your experiment with the form while tackling a difficult subject!

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  21. Stellar job on this piece. This is a truly perceptive articulation of 'pain' ... a challenging theme (I would imagine, though I have not yet tried) to get from 'feeling' to 'page'. 'Darkness is vast; words lengthen in silence, attenuate' ... really impactful.

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  22. Really long poems are very painful to someone like me who has a short attention span:)

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  23. Isn't is "funny" that we have to explain that the speaker in a poem we write is not necessarily us?

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    1. I think it would once have been understood, but with all the confessional and autobiographical stuff around nowadays, it is often assumed that they all are. (And indeed,many of mine are.) I just thought I'd get in first this time, instead of having to reassure several kind-hearted readers individually!

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