I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world, to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

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5 July 2015

Versification Unsublime

Pain defeats poetry;
I resort to mere verse.
My back in spasm
demands full attention.

Doggerel or worse
is my best. The orgasm
of lyrical beauty eludes me,
as does invention.

Yet, may this exercise in rhyme
(called bref doublé)
rate some mention

if only as a weird phantasm
in the annals of poetic divers-
ity.


A 55-word piece for 'imaginary garden with real toads'. Also my Day One offering in the facebook poetry chain for which I was just nominated. And, finally, linking to Gillena's 'Sunday Lime'.
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18 comments:

  1. Gail5 July 2015 at 10:20

    You did very well for someone who could not.

    Thanks for visiting. I thought in mine there was but one line that I would keep.

    Have a great evening.

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  2. Sanaa Rizvi5 July 2015 at 11:41

    Excellent write :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  3. Jim5 July 2015 at 16:19

    I like your tem, 'near verse.' I will use it, thank you.

    Today I wrote, called it poetry
    But only "near verse" my critics cried.
    ..

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  4. brudberg5 July 2015 at 19:35

    I think you meet the challenge well .. we try as we can as well as we can.

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  5. Kerry O'Connor5 July 2015 at 20:19

    I am sorry you are feeling poorly, Rosemary. Your first line is most succinct and very true, though pain may provide a way to art after all.

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  6. Anonymous5 July 2015 at 22:55

    Out of your pain you wrote relatable-ly. I am sorry for your back problems. Hope you feel better soon.

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  7. Lolamouse6 July 2015 at 01:01

    It is, indeed, so difficult to write beautifully when you're in pain. I hope yours diminishes very soon. BTW, your poem expressed your situation very well despite the pain!

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  8. Other Mary6 July 2015 at 03:48

    Love your title, but I"m sorry you're in pain. That affects every aspect of life. I hope yours passes soon.

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  9. Outlawyer6 July 2015 at 06:32

    You have a wonderful sense of humor even in your pain--feel better! Much enjoyed, but not at the expense of your suffering! k.

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  10. Sherry Blue Sky6 July 2015 at 06:39

    So sorry your back is spasming - your poem is stellar even so! Hope you feel well soon.

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  11. Marian6 July 2015 at 08:21

    Yes, I so appreciate your sense of humor too, Rosemary. Hope the pain clears. I rather like this poem despite the pain beneath it. And especially your last word cut across two lines, that seems genius.

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    1. Rosemary Nissen-Wade6 July 2015 at 08:33

      Ha ha, that was because only the first syllable was the rhyme — and yes, I was being a bit humorous. :)

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  12. Maude Lynn6 July 2015 at 13:56

    Oh, I feel for you! Hope you get some relief soon.

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  13. Sara McNulty7 July 2015 at 13:10

    You did so well with this form!

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  14. grapeling7 July 2015 at 13:33

    witty and wise. and I too suffer from back pain ~

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  15. Annie8 July 2015 at 01:36

    You had me at the word "mere". One of my favorite words.

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  16. Susie Clevenger8 July 2015 at 16:01

    "pain defeats poetry" I so understand that. I escape into words when the pain steals my day.

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  17. Jyotsna Bhatia13 July 2015 at 04:15

    Wow. That was something. Liked it :)

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