I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world,
to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

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6 July 2015

Ripping It Up

Hypnotised by his own music
dances to the beat
JIG jig  / JIG jig / JIG jig / THUMP!

and the guitar whines
and the guitar shrieks
and the guitar becomes

a deadly mosquito
cre-SCENdo-ing
to stab, to pierce.

I am all over the floor
destroyed
remade.

There is nowhere
left to go
and no need.


Day Two of facebook poetry chain. Linked to Gillena's Monday WRites and to The Tuesday Platform at 'imaginary garden with real toads'.



20 comments:

  1. Wow... I loved the way you expressed :)

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  2. And now I want to dance. Gonna turn on the music right now!

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  3. "I am all over the floor/destroyed/remade." WOW!

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  4. This is awesome! Loved your style :D

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  5. This has punch! Like the way it comes together!

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  6. It gets to question the why and wherefores of the guitar music's intruding interlude. Will music make that much difference to affect the bubbling soul? Intrusive take Rosemary! Great thinking!

    Hank

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  7. i find mosquitoes to be sooo annoying, i swat them with an electronic swatter; Thanks for linking up at Monday WRites, Rosemary

    much love...

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  8. I think I have seen that person.. It's great to keep in shape though.

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  9. This sounds like funk music given a voice. Love the mosquito analogy. That stings well.

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  10. I love me some Neil Young!!!

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  11. I like your poem and have known this feeling.

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  12. Uh oh...it's the lead up to the full moon again LOL ! Take it easy Rosemary !

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  13. Pretty much describes my attempt at dancing! Liking the guitar stanza ...great little poem

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  14. This is an innovative approach to poetry writing, especially in the way you have included sound devices.

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  15. Well, YOU completely ripped this up. Awesome piece :-) It's so effectively written that I can see it/hear it.

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  16. I feel this one...I feel the music, the dance...life to a beat.

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  17. This made me think.... everybody knows this is nowhere. Wonderful!
    It's been a while since I danced like that. I should do something about that!

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  18. love this. It made me think of my boyfriend who often plays his guitar at home.

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