I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world,
to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

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27 November 2010

Defining Moment

(Triolet)

At Uluwatu the water boiled green.
Su was with me in the temple on the cliff.
Was there anything more beautiful I’d ever seen?
At Uluwatu the water boiled green
and the froth was lacy. I had not foreseen
that gorgeous abyss, the unspoken ‘What if?’
At Uluwatu the water boiled green
as Su and I stood on top of the cliff.


November PAD Chapbook Challenge 2010: 23
Prompt: a ‘form’ poem.


Submitted for dVerse Poetics: It's Tempting

9 comments:

  1. interesting....is there meaning to the water boiling green? what ifs...are def a temptation...the regrets...dont think this is about that though.. was it to cliff jump?

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    1. Yes — in a way. The cliff here is both real and metaphorical, and line 3 deliberately ambiguous.

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  2. this has something mysterious...the green boiled water...the abyss...the what if...sometimes we come to places that reach from the seen into the unseen...well played..

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  3. This is breathtaking, Rosemary. That view, that water, that temptation.......

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  4. the unspoken 'what if?' I think you just nailed temptation in 4 words!

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  5. First of all, I love triolets and the temptation to jump, and after googling Uluwati it seems not to healthy.. Glad you didn't :-)

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  6. its is a breathtaking view from there, I did not feel like coming down as if wanting to float and fly with the span of the beauty that lay there. It is a wonderful place...!

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