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27 November 2010

Defining Moment

(Triolet)

At Uluwatu the water boiled green.
Su was with me in the temple on the cliff.
Was there anything more beautiful I’d ever seen?
At Uluwatu the water boiled green
and the froth was lacy. I had not foreseen
that gorgeous abyss, the unspoken ‘What if?’
At Uluwatu the water boiled green
as Su and I stood on top of the cliff.


November PAD Chapbook Challenge 2010: 23
Prompt: a ‘form’ poem.

Submitted for dVerse Poetics: It's Tempting
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9 comments:

  1. Brian Miller12 May 2013 at 21:05

    interesting....is there meaning to the water boiling green? what ifs...are def a temptation...the regrets...dont think this is about that though.. was it to cliff jump?

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    1. Rosemary Nissen-Wade13 May 2013 at 09:34

      Yes — in a way. The cliff here is both real and metaphorical, and line 3 deliberately ambiguous.

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  2. Claudia12 May 2013 at 21:16

    this has something mysterious...the green boiled water...the abyss...the what if...sometimes we come to places that reach from the seen into the unseen...well played..

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  3. Mary12 May 2013 at 22:37

    This is breathtaking, Rosemary. That view, that water, that temptation.......

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  4. aka_andrea12 May 2013 at 22:44

    the unspoken 'what if?' I think you just nailed temptation in 4 words!

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  5. brudberg12 May 2013 at 23:41

    First of all, I love triolets and the temptation to jump, and after googling Uluwati it seems not to healthy.. Glad you didn't :-)

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  6. Akila13 May 2013 at 15:26

    its is a breathtaking view from there, I did not feel like coming down as if wanting to float and fly with the span of the beauty that lay there. It is a wonderful place...!

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