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4 December 2016

Obliteration

He thinks to wipe his face away,
making pain a mask. Not play
but anguish prompts this frantic task.
Obliteration? He would ask
not to hide, rather reveal
the ugliness he cannot heal,
imposing inner truth upon
the human face he wishes gone –
exposing self as mask of pain
over, over, and over again.


Written for Flash 55 PLUS (Dec. 3, 2016) at 'imaginary garden with real toads' – the 'PLUS' being a response to this video:



16 comments:

  1. I like how this poem relates to the character in the clip. It feels like it resonated with you, and this poem is a sturdy result. Well done and viva la.

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  2. Delicious rhythm. I love the way in which it dances with the emotions brewed by the clip.

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  3. This captures the pain so much, the vainless effort to cover up, just making it worse. A vicious circle of denial.

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  4. You have given such a powerful voice to the man in the clip!! Especially in awe of "He would ask not to hide, rather reveal the ugliness he cannot heal, imposing inner truth upon the human face he wishes gone" Beautifully rendered.


    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  5. the ugliness he cannot heal,
    imposing inner truth upon
    the human face he wishes gone

    Perhaps there are elements who just can't take it anymore. There could be shameful episodes to face or committed by them that the world came to know. Thoughtful take Rosemary!

    Hank

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  6. imposing inner truth upon
    the human face he wishes gone..

    What an excellent summation of the performance.

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  7. An excellent and feeling interpretation of the insanity in the clip. All its angst, and all its futility.

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  8. "Exposing self as mask of pain"..........this is such a profound poem, Rosemary. Could apply to certain despots in our current reality, who have no awareness of self.

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    1. Interesting way of looking at it, Sherry! Not what I was thinking of – but I suppose that, for all of us, our current realities can be so huge that they become the filter through which we view everything.

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  9. Excellent capture of life's challenge

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  10. "the human face he wishes gone.' - That line is the core of this amazing poem.

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  11. I do love rhyming when it works. It's written all over our face.

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  12. Probably pain is often the task.

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  13. The rhythm is amazing in this and that last line and it's use of repetition feels perfect to drive home the trapped feeling in the video.

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  14. oh...this absolutely speaks for that performance!

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