this morning
devoid of song
I almost
would come into the room
where the sun comes in
and I wonder about that.
Rain is auspicious,
a different thing.
It's all over now — but still
if the way had been clear....
Some give up altogether. I go on.
At least the marigolds
covered the road,
creating a new path
as one dimly remembered
more than any other.
That memory of that moment,
indeterminate as clouds —
this is everything!
Where have you gone
from ghosts and weeping?
Without breaking down and screaming,
it seems uncertain.
Darkness.
Poetic Asides April Poem A Day Challenge 2013, 29: Use a line from a previous April poem as title.
I decided to have fun taking it further and making a whole poem out of lines from previous poems written this April, i.e. a cento. To be specific, an 'egomaniacal cento'; the normal cento uses lines from other poets. (The resulting poem is nonsense, of course — but I hope that it almost makes sense!)
Also submitted 8 Feb, 2015 to Poets United's Poetry Pantry #238
Also submitted 8 Feb, 2015 to Poets United's Poetry Pantry #238
Yes it do make total sense, and if you had not told us of its creation I wouldn't have seen it. The road lies open with adventures, and like Bilbo I want to set out on furry feet to battle dragons and darkness.
ReplyDeleteBless you Bjorn! Perhaps we can be travelling companions. :)
Deletehey - i'm in as well... smiles
DeleteBring the paints! :)
DeleteWow, you said it! To me it flowed and came out just like any other morning full of broken but perfect thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThank you, that was the effect I was trying for.
Deleteit does make sense...and it's a cool idea as well... i loved the marigold path part especially and the going on...despite the rain...
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked it - both poem and idea.
Deletewell makes sense to me, keep writing :D
ReplyDeleteThis is not so implausible I have often got up with a jumbled mind and my thinking is not coherent, beautiful like the marigolds perhaps or even depressing like the need for more darkness in bed before the day is really faced.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it works for you.
Deletenice...i agree it maks sense, there is a sense of mystery about it though, as if there is more to the story, something just out of reach of my fingers...
ReplyDeleteOh, that's nice. (Maybe the out-of-reach is all those other poems the lines came from, lol.)
DeleteNot nonsense at all..a profound poem..the line i like the most is I go on...we may always know the ending..but that is key..going on in as many ways we can..who knows what adventures may arise
ReplyDeleteA friend who read it suggested it does make sense because I could not help tapping into my subconscious in choosing which lines to use. He could be right.
DeleteWe do have to go on. There really is no other choice!
ReplyDeleteisn't cool how you can take some old and make it something new... nice bit of adventure here
ReplyDeleteYes, I love being able to do that!
DeleteI like the way you created this poem. And, yes, it does make sense.
ReplyDeleteIt opened up interesting possibilities for me, in revision of other pieces.
DeleteThe next adventure is always uncertain...and that makes it very interesting ~
ReplyDeleteGrace
It does seem uncertain. We so want to know more about that next leg of the journey, don't we Rosemary?
ReplyDeleteThis is true too. :)
DeleteSurreal ways open only as we look for them. I'd forget the rain that passed and go with the marigolds.
ReplyDeleteSusan, your comment reads like lines of poetry too! (I might use them.)
DeleteThis is one of my favourites of yours, Rosemary - especially "some give up altogether. I go on" and "where have you gone from ghosts and weeping". Wonderful work!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sherry. It was fun to do.
DeleteWell said/written
ReplyDeleteZQ
It all seems to make sense to me as I see beyond the darkness as I travel a path of marigolds where there is sunlight.
ReplyDeleteI think you bring your own light to it! :)
Deletethe uncertainty is what urges one to go on right..if we knew everything life will become stagnant... it does make lot of sense..smiles,,
ReplyDeleteThat guts you have to continue to go despite the darkness & being left alone will lead you farther to a place where success is beyond measure. This is a true gem of a poem to read, Rosemary. I'm glad you wrote this.
ReplyDelete- ksm
Thank you, dear Kelvin, you give me heart.
DeleteFeels a bit like Dorothy, with the golden road.
ReplyDeleteOh, it's brilliant! You take us with you to find that 'something' what is gone, evolved and disappeared in cycle of things....it's almost like trying to stop the moment by Goethe's Faust....everyone can relate.
ReplyDeleteThis made sense to me. Made me think of risk taking, going into the dark courageously.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like it was fun to compose this. It was fun to read it.
Love the process notes as it begs another read of the poem. What a great idea for revising this is. And it does make sense in so many ways: early morning bed head, jumbled thoughts, then getting up and going on.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
So much snow here in NH. This really hits home.
ReplyDeleteIt is not uncommon to be wondering what is in store for the day! Good decision to give your poem a once-over. Brought it in to a different perspective and a better treatment! Wonderful write Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteHank
Beautiful! Love, "Where have you gone from ghosts and weeping....." Gorgeous!
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