I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world,
to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

This blog is not, 'Here are my very best poems'. It's for work in progress, subject to revision.
Posts may be updated without notice at any time. Completed work appears in my books.

29 July 2011

I Am Awaiting

I am awaiting his approaching death.
There, I’ve said it openly at last —
although in writing only, not with breath.

The slowing present hurries to be past,
the dear days dawdling to their close too fast.

Meanwhile, for the most part, we pretend
liveliness doesn’t lag and life won’t end.


An experiment in rime royal, prompted by FormForAll at dVerse

12 comments:

  1. Very neat and the form echoes the sentiment expressed in the last lines, a certain briskness that covers the more somber message. A bit of Dickinson feel, almost. Excellent and well-crafted piece (and I love the title of your blog.)

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  2. Very poignant verses. Nicely done!

    David

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  3. Heartbreaking and beautifully done. The first lines steal your breath.

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  4. While you made a few alterations to the strictness of the meter by use of caesura, you're poem nevertheless
    captures Rime Royal perfectly.

    I completely sympathize with the poem; I am caring for an old friend in the throes of therapy for stage 3 cancer. Death may certainly be easier than the torture he's been enduring.

    Thank you for writing and linking your excellent poem today.

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  5. Even writing it down allows for an understanding.
    Now you can rage against it albeit delicately or thoughtfully as in this piece.

    write for life.

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  6. Many thanks to you all for these comments! It was an act of daring to post this one (even to write it) so I really appreciate your encouragement.

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  7. That's a brave poem you wrote; it is not captured any by the rhyme, but the rhyme does suggest the inevitable. In peace and with love.

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  8. Thanks, Rob! Actually I don't want to give the impression this end will be soon; it seems more a gradual deterioration which, nevertheless, reminds me of the inevitable.

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  9. I like all of it. I struggled with this form but you did an excellent job.

    Thanks for sharing this ~

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  10. Don't worry, I struggled too! I'm glad you liked it.

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  11. This poem has sheer poetic power, Rosemary...the lines are intense and the pace brilliant.

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  12. Thank you, Raj. I appreciate your saying so.

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