I ... entered the poem of life, whose purpose is ... simply to witness the beauties of the world, to discover the many forms that love can take. (Barabara Blackman in 'Glass After Glass')

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1 March 2015

Outing

(Brunswick Heads)


My friends took me picnicking
with wine and prawns.
I got lots of photos
of fishing boats.

In a shop, I asked:
‘I suppose this doll
isn’t for sale,
but the entertainment
of young children?’

‘Take, it!’ the woman said.
‘How kind,’ said my friend.
I told her, ‘She sees
that I am a child.’
















After doing a 55-word piece for the toads, I wanted to try another. This one is for dVerse Open Link Night: Celebrating Poetry. (Following Brian's kind suggestions, I've revised it in the next post.)

19 comments:

  1. This is an outing that could hurt no one!

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    1. True ... and I'm glad you got the double meaning.

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  2. smiling at the compassion
    of the lady in the shop --- first to see you
    and second to give you the doll.

    if i may, it feels more tell than show, and quite fast...not easy to pull off a 55 word story, but a few things to keep in mind...

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  3. Oh I think that there is a child in everyone of us.. what a sweet way to give away something like that.

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  4. Ha. Very charming. Thanks, Rosemary. K. (Manicddaily)

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  5. smiles... how lovely that she gave you the doll... and oh - a day out with wine, prawns and fishing boats....that sounds like a lovely day

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  6. I hope we never lose the child within us.

    Thanks for stopping by.

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  7. I like how each verse invites us in ~

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  8. This is funny and delightful. It seems perfect that it is a doll that she gives you in the end. The whole poem makes me silly-happy.

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    1. Then I have successfully recreated and conveyed my own mood at the time. :)

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  9. How nice of the lady to gift you the doll. Isn't it wonderful to still have that child within outed once in a while?

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  10. Prawns, wine and a gift, what more could you ask? I love these small outings and the fishing ports. Your poem reminded me of weekends in Sweden.

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  11. I bet the event made your day. And who told you you can't own a doll today? Smiles. This is lovely!


    - ksm

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  12. The perfect ending, Rosemary. Let's play!

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  13. What a delightful scene Rosemary :) There is a child in our soul just waiting for such moments!

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  14. How generous & kind of the lady to gift the pretty doll!
    Delightful & heartwarming words :)

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