We used to walk here
to this table
above the creek, take
notebooks out
and pens of course,
companionable,
we sat just here
together, wrote
by trees and water:
calm delight.
I see, returning to the
spot,
it’s been repainted, this
old table....
We used to walk
for twenty minutes, rest in quiet
right here beside the
creek, and write.
Now here again alone,
I’m able
to view the place at
last — oh, sweet! —
we used to walk.
Submitted for dVerse Form for All: the Rondeau
Lovely, and poignant, Rosemary--from the companionable pens to the loneliness at the end--very sad--take care and thanks. k.
ReplyDeleteLike your refrain, Rosemary, and feel the movement between the stanzas: from sitting to walking again...It seems the walking continues in today....Nice take on the form.
ReplyDeleteIt has been repainted, but the spirit of the place remains.
ReplyDeleteah, i would not mind a sit just to write there on the edge of nature...as a palce you went together i imagine it carries plenty of memories as well....
ReplyDeleteA touching piece about friendship is how I take this...something strong and enduring with the use of rhymes words able, companionable, and table...sweet..
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely tie-in to love-filled moments of the past. You were brave to go there and I believe your courage paid off. No?
ReplyDeleteYour style is so fluent that one totally forgets about the form used.
Wonderful reminiscing in your lovely rondeau.
ReplyDeleteSuch a peaceful memory of friendship and shared creativity. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThis is so filled with lovely memories.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful memory ~ keep them alive in your heart ~ Lovely rondeau & poignant words ~
ReplyDeleteLovely and sad. A place so tied to good memories can be a place of healing beyond the grief. Beautiful writing!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and also sad. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Brilliant refrain filled with sadness and longing for days past. wonderful rhythm and a great rondeau
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking us on this memory lane rondeau - so well done!
ReplyDeleteA thirteen-line rondeau! Definitely an established variant of the form. You certainly gave yourself a challenge with your main rhyme - then you rose to it ... smiles. I love the melancholy rentrement - we used to walk - which is full of longing for what once was, but is no longer.
ReplyDeleteThank you. And gosh, I'm glad 13 lines is an established variant - it was accidental, from my unfamiliarity with the form!
DeleteSad and memorable. Good upgrade on use of the form.
ReplyDeleteIts such a poignant trip down the memory lane...what a rondeau! Kudos..
ReplyDeletevery poignant and the slant rhymes add a magic here.! Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThanks to everyone for the very kind comments. Some of you know this referred to my late husband, but those who saw it as being about friendship were not wrong — he was my best friend and dearest companion.
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