tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post2638957604257692279..comments2023-11-07T07:53:32.305+11:00Comments on The Passionate Crone (poetry): Across the MorningRosemary Nissen-Wadehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-6895977631763097642012-12-17T18:02:08.690+11:002012-12-17T18:02:08.690+11:00I could really relate to your poem. Well done.I could really relate to your poem. Well done.Madeleine Begun Kanehttp://www.madkane.com/humor_blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-27213329605430370472012-12-17T09:47:38.522+11:002012-12-17T09:47:38.522+11:00Hoe you need do no more shovelling! Glad you enjoy...Hoe you need do no more shovelling! Glad you enjoyed this piece.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-72369794108665058062012-12-17T09:46:51.268+11:002012-12-17T09:46:51.268+11:00I agree with you ‚ but these fictional characters ...I agree with you ‚ but these fictional characters have minds of their own.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-54446292537802154852012-12-17T01:25:36.122+11:002012-12-17T01:25:36.122+11:00I wish she'd carried on after the second stanz...I wish she'd carried on after the second stanza...a definite pity she had to come back to common sense.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-46425837229850830962012-12-17T01:22:50.330+11:002012-12-17T01:22:50.330+11:00I hope her rebel self does emerge and takes back c...I hope her rebel self does emerge and takes back control of her oh-so-controlled life.<br />Really enjoyed this. Thanks for the visit. My fingers have now returned to normal from being frozen from shoveling. A warmer climate sounds good to me :)Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-36206568054701538822012-12-09T02:52:19.804+11:002012-12-09T02:52:19.804+11:00Even in a form-poem your beauty shines through.
W...Even in a form-poem your beauty shines through.<br /><br />We have 2 parakeets and I can relate to the just flying and singing for the love of life.<br /><br />xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-60223818504249785542012-12-02T04:53:45.978+11:002012-12-02T04:53:45.978+11:00I love the walking in silence to hear the birds, a...I love the walking in silence to hear the birds, and their knowing what's important. Great write, kiddo!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-38532979518463014722012-12-01T09:33:22.347+11:002012-12-01T09:33:22.347+11:00Thanks for coming! I'm glad you like it. I enj...Thanks for coming! I'm glad you like it. I enjoy playing with form now and again, and it's amazing what different forms can produce.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-28666528313850942812012-11-30T01:02:03.291+11:002012-11-30T01:02:03.291+11:00First: "Sabio sent me" and I'm glad ...First: "Sabio sent me" and I'm glad he did--have enjoyed reading and thinking about "Across the Morning". <br /><br />Like how you went full circle from common-sense self to deeper/rebel self back to common-sense and ended with a repeat of your opening sentence. Very successful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-78986482787021032152012-11-29T08:39:28.182+11:002012-11-29T08:39:28.182+11:00Apparently iambic pentameter is the natural rhythm...Apparently iambic pentameter is the natural rhythm of English speech, so it's easy for us English-speakers to use. The only danger is that it can get a bit sing-song. I like the variations throughout this form.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-85853922731711123512012-11-29T08:37:12.956+11:002012-11-29T08:37:12.956+11:00Thank you, Brian. Yes, I believe nature in general...Thank you, Brian. Yes, I believe nature in general is full of lessons for us if we care to pay attention.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-31295726301049832852012-11-29T08:35:05.598+11:002012-11-29T08:35:05.598+11:00Thank you for your understanding, Victoria. I alwa...Thank you for your understanding, Victoria. I always hope to convey the universal through the particular.<br /><br />I think — after only this one attempt at this form! — that hitting on the right first line is a key,Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-14993161749457134832012-11-29T08:29:52.049+11:002012-11-29T08:29:52.049+11:00Ha ha, it seems we're all on the side of the r...Ha ha, it seems we're all on the side of the rebellious spirit! Sabio is quite right in that it's my inner truth, even though the details of the poem are fictional.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-10100231340657785052012-11-29T08:27:55.607+11:002012-11-29T08:27:55.607+11:00Yes, it's a nice form to work with. Just that ...Yes, it's a nice form to work with. Just that bit different.<br />Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-41409224594031167382012-11-29T05:38:52.755+11:002012-11-29T05:38:52.755+11:00I just love this, the whole meaning behind it. It ...I just love this, the whole meaning behind it. It seems life is a balancing act between awareness and responsibility. The form works so well. Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-68960024668697132412012-11-29T04:49:08.419+11:002012-11-29T04:49:08.419+11:00Oh, I hope so. This 'message' cuts across...Oh, I hope so. This 'message' cuts across time and age....and is as viable at any age, time.<br /><br />Very nice....<br /><br />Lady NyoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-29308881626534521862012-11-29T03:29:14.936+11:002012-11-29T03:29:14.936+11:00I, too, share this rebellious spirit whole-hearted...I, too, share this rebellious spirit whole-heartedly! Nice write Rosemary!Chris Woodhttp://www.paintingyouwithwords.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-12197565313920580992012-11-29T01:33:13.379+11:002012-11-29T01:33:13.379+11:00Hoping that the deeper self, the rebel self DOES i...Hoping that the deeper self, the rebel self DOES in fact emerge. I enjoyed this poetry form!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-13131682727448731982012-11-29T00:44:22.457+11:002012-11-29T00:44:22.457+11:00Lots of layers here to move the stanzas...very nat...Lots of layers here to move the stanzas...very natural feel to your rhythms here. It takes the reader where you want to go. Nice job.Steve Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04818671944215117618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-54846504188950975112012-11-29T00:15:49.588+11:002012-11-29T00:15:49.588+11:00smiles...sounds like she has found a bit of wisdom...smiles...sounds like she has found a bit of wisdom in the wild...there is much to be gleened there...from the birds...very cool verse...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-83339308899683644642012-11-28T22:39:00.163+11:002012-11-28T22:39:00.163+11:00This is great, love it !This is great, love it !ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-9615741620373577672012-11-28T22:15:57.029+11:002012-11-28T22:15:57.029+11:00Ah well, I have always said that fact and truth ar...Ah well, I have always said that fact and truth are not necessarily the same thing and that fiction can be truer. :)<br /><br />Good detective work!Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-33292227323157032282012-11-28T22:10:33.772+11:002012-11-28T22:10:33.772+11:00Ah, great fiction. Too bad it is not true -- it m...Ah, great fiction. Too bad it is not true -- it must be 'true' in part of your heart. <br /><br />As I looked around for the form source, all I saw was people quoting the same stuff. But after some foot work I did find something:<br /><br /> Eve Braden was born in 1928 in Tennesse and indeed did invent this form. Here is a book published by her: "<a href="http://www.worldcat.org/title/dorsimbra-ii-a-second-book-of-poems-in-a-new-form/oclc/7999754" rel="nofollow">Dorsimbra II</a>"(1978)<br /><br />You can see <a href="http://www.utc.edu/Academic/TennesseeWriters/authors/braden.eve.html" rel="nofollow">her other works here</a>.Sabio Lantzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12963476276106907984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-44765990412762209242012-11-28T21:57:54.161+11:002012-11-28T21:57:54.161+11:00Thanks, Claudia, for your thoughtful comment.Thanks, Claudia, for your thoughtful comment.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3313195297275159246.post-68673877641668798772012-11-28T21:57:11.958+11:002012-11-28T21:57:11.958+11:00I'm glad you vote for that! :)I'm glad you vote for that! :)Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.com